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Statement of Purpose
My purpose for applying the Doctoral program is to expand on my
existing knowledge and to create additional opportunities for myself
in the future. I believe that Doctoral program will prepare me for a
successful and challenging career in the education area.
I have been teaching in Taiwan for almost three years now.  I have
taught in high school, college, and cram school.  After a complete
thought, I finally decided to continue my teaching career in adult
learning . In order to give students more knowledge and information, I
believe that pursuing a higher degree is necessary.  Also, through the
research, I can use the research result to help students in learning.
Since I am now teaching in the college, I can use my students as
resources to do the research work. I strongly feel that Doctor of
Education program at University of xxx is a highly structured program
because it provides the right balance between theory and practice.
Your program not only provides taught program which will gave me more
knowledge in education area, but also provides me great environment
for research. I believe your school is the best choice for my Doctoral
degree.
English has become one of the requirements for many positions in most
companies. Therefore, teaching college students how to use English in
work field is now very important task for college English teachers.  I
found personality has a great influence in their English learning. 
Therefore, according to their personality, to design a good learning
program will help students in English learning.  Good designed program
not  only can improve their English abilities, but also it can
increase their interest in learning.
I hope my background and qualifications are found suitable for
admission to Doctor of Education program.

Netnerd...

Suggested changes are bracketed:

Statement of Purpose

My purpose [in] applying [for] the Doctoral program is to expand []
my existing knowledge and to create additional opportunities for 
myself in the future. I believe that [your] Doctoral program will
prepare me for a successful and challenging career in the [field of]
education.

I have been teaching in Taiwan for almost three years now. I have
taught in high school, college, and cram [?***] school. After 
[considerable] thought, I finally decided to [focus] my teaching
career in [the area of] adult learning . [I believe that,] in order
to [better provide my] students [with the opportunity to acquire]
more knowledge[], pursuing a higher degree is necessary. Also, 
[by engaging in doctoral] research, I can use the result[s] to 
[better assist] students in [the process of] learning. Since I am
now teaching in [a] college, I can [utilize] my students as resources
[in doing] the research work.

I strongly feel that [the] Doctor of Education program at [the]
University of xxx is an [ideally structured] program because it 
provides the right balance between theory and practice.
Your program not only provides [a curriculum] which will gave me more
knowledge in [the area of] education, but also provides me [an] 
environment [which is conducive to] research. [For these reasons,]
I believe your school is the best choice for my Doctoral degree.

English has become [a] requirement for many positions in most
companies. Therefore, teaching college students how to use English in
[their] work [environment] is now [a] very important task for college
English teachers. I [have] found [that the] personalities [of the 
students] has a great influence in their [process of learning] English. 

Therefore, [I believe that designing] a program [which takes their
personalities into account] will [greatly assist] students in [learning
English]. [A well-designed] program [can] not only improve their 
abilities to utilize the English language, but it can [also]
[enhance] their interest in [the process of] learning [itself].

I [sincerely] hope my background and qualifications are found suitable
for admission to [your] Doctor of Education program.


*** I am not familiar with the term 'cram' school, so I cannot advise
you as to its correct usage.


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Thanks a lot. You are wonderful!! You did an excellent job!!

I believe that "cram school" may have actually meant "grad school"
instead. Perhaps from a spelling mistake, followed by a spell check.
(I.E. crad to cram... or gram to cram.)

cram school means a center which provides English or math tutoring
service for students after school hours.

Statement of Purpose
I am applying to the Doctoral program to expand my
existing knowledge and to create additional opportunities for myself
in the future.  I have been teaching in Taiwan for almost three years.  I have
taught in high school, college, and cram school.  After much consideration, 
I decided to continue my teaching career in adult learning.
I believe that a higher degree will make me a more effective educator.  
English has become a requirement for employment at many companies.
Thus, teaching college students how to use English in their workplace
is now a very important task.  Also, I look forward to researching
methods to assist students with their learning.  I have found that a
student?s personality has a great influence upon his or her learning. 
I look forward to researching educational methods that adapt to meet
the needs of individual students.  A well-designed program can improve
their English skills by maintaining their interest in learning.  My
experiences as a college teacher will help to direct my research.

Furthermore, I am attracted to your program?s structure.  I feel that
it provides the right balance between theory and practice.  The
University of xx Doctoral Program provides both a valuable teaching
experience and an environment that fosters research.  It is the best
choice for my Doctoral
degree. I believe that your Doctoral program will prepare me for a
successful and challenging career in education.

netnerd...

Thanks for the 5 stars and kind comments.

I just noticed a spelling error I missed:

"Your program not only provides [a curriculum] which will
 gave me more knowledge in [the area of] education..."

It should read:

"Your program not only provides [a curriculum] which will
 give me more knowledge in [the area of] education..."

So 'give' rather than 'gave'.

sublime1-ga