Hi jackdurden,
The following is the grammatically corrected version of your original
text. I have indicated the corrections needed with brackets for the
first one. The second one is the final corrected draft.
The Princeton dictionary defines a hero as a person being of great
strength and courage[,] celebrated for bold exploits[.] [However,] is
that truly what the word hero means? I believe in three types of
heroes. The hero who saves someone from danger[;] someone [who] gives
up his or her life so another [person can] live. The hero who sees a
need[,] and moves toward meeting it, even in the face of real
sacrifice. Someone who believes in a just cause[,] and will not give
up[; who will] fight or die for that cause. And the hero who is there
to help others and gives them strength to go through life?s
difficulties.
[Examples] of hero[es] who put his or her life in danger to help
others [are] firefighter[s], police officer[s] [and] solider[s]. The US Army
soldier?s job is to defend our country[.] [E]veryday they are fighting for
our values and our way of life. So many of them have died on the
battlefield, and [whether] we believe in the war they are fighting [or
nor,] we cannot deny [their courage.] Firefighters and policemen put
their [lives] on the line everyday so that others may live. Like the
firefighters [who] risked their lives by entering the [W]orld [T]rade
[C]enter. They entered the collapsing towers without hesitation, and
with haste. They had the courage, will, and moral duty that pushed
them forward in the direction of the people that needed help. They did
it[,] not because it was their job[,] but because the people inside
needed their help. They chose to act[,] and it cost them their
lives[.] [A]nd for that, they are[,] and will always be[,] remembered
as true heroes.
Another example of a hero to me is someone who makes an impact in
a person?s life. A hero does not always have to be strong or
courageous[.] [H]e or she can be a hero through his or her actions. A
hero can be a teacher, a school counselor or a parent. They can teach
you, care, and lookout for you[,] and can make a huge difference in
your life. When you have a problem these are the people [whom] you
know you can always go to for guidance and help. Even as a young
boy[,] I can remember waking [up] from a nightmare and being able to
calm down[,] knowing that I was safe because my dad was in the next room.
Without my parents I would not be here today. They had [the] courage
to raise a big family of nine brothers and sisters and they will
always be my heroes for it. These people are the heroes that are
overlooked everyday and don?t get the recognition and gratitude they
deserve.
A hero can be a person [who] stands up for a just and noble cause.
Martin Luther King Jr. is a hero because he took a stand against
powerful people when no one else would. Although doubted and
threatened[,] he never gave up his fight for civil rights. He stood up
for what he believed in[,] and was killed because of it. Mahatma
Gandhi is a hero because of his advocacy of nonviolent mass protest
and civil disobedience. He saw nonviolence as the most effective way
of achieving social change and has instructed freedom movements, even
after his death, all over the world. These are heroes who not [only]
saved a life[,] but helped create a better place for us all to live.
A hero doesn?t have to be strong, [nor project] great physical strength
[and courage.]. A hero has to be a person[,] that when the time
comes[,] [must] follow moral obligation[s], step up to the plate,
mak[e] sacrifice[s], and [be] willing to put others before their [own]
pride and self interests. A hero can be a person [who] is willing to
risk themselves to save a life, willing to fight and even die for a
cause, and even just simply being a good teacher or parent that make a
difference in a person[']s life.We can only hope that one day[,] we
[too] will step up to the plate and become that hero[;] willing to
make a sacrifice, willing to stand up for what we believe in and
change a person?s life for the better. Only then can we hope to be
worthy [of being] called true heroes.
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The Princeton dictionary defines a hero as a person being of great
strength and courage, celebrated for bold exploits. However, is that
truly what the word hero means? I believe in three types of heroes.
The hero who saves someone from danger; someone who gives up his or
her life so another person can live. The hero who sees a need, and
moves toward meeting it, even in the face of real sacrifice. Someone
who believes in a just cause, and will not give up; who will fight or
die for that cause. And the hero who is there to help others and gives
them strength to go through life?s difficulties.
Examples of heroes who put his or her life in danger to help
others are firefighters, police officers and soliders. The US Army
soldier?s job is to defend our country. Everyday they are fighting for
our values and our way of life. So many of them have died on the
battlefield, and whether we believe in the war they are fighting or
nor, we cannot deny their courage. Firefighters and policemen put
their lives on the line everyday so that others may live. Like the
firefighters who risked their lives by entering the World Trade
Center. They entered the collapsing towers without hesitation, and
with haste. They had the courage, will, and moral duty that pushed
them forward in the
direction of the people that needed help. They did it, not because it
was their job, but because the people inside needed their help. They
chose to act, and it cost them their lives. And for that, they are,
and will always be, remembered as true heroes.
Another example of a hero to me is someone who makes an impact in
a person?s life. A hero does not always have to be strong or
courageous. He or she can be a hero through his or her actions. A hero
can be a teacher, a school counselor or a parent. They can teach you,
care, and lookout for you, and can make a huge difference in your
life. When you have a problem these are the people whom you know you
can always go to for guidance and help. Even as a
young boy, I can remember waking up from a nightmare and being able to
calm down, knowing that I was safe because my dad was in the next
room. Without my parents I would not be here today. They had the
courage to raise a big family of nine brothers and sisters and they
will always be my heroes for it. These people are the heroes that are
overlooked everyday and don?t get the recognition and gratitude they
deserve.
A hero can be a person who stands up for a just and noble cause.
Martin Luther King Jr. is a hero because he took a stand against
powerful people when no one else would. Although doubted and
threatened, he never gave up his fight for civil rights. He stood up
for what he believed in, and was killed because of it. Mahatma Gandhi
is a hero because of his advocacy of nonviolent mass protest and civil
disobedience. He saw nonviolence as the most effective way of
achieving social change and has instructed freedom movements, even
after his death, all over the world. These are heroes who not only
saved a life, but helped create a better place for us all to live.
A hero doesn?t have to be strong, nor project great physical strength
and courage. A hero has to be a person, that when the time comes, must
follow moral obligations, step up to the plate, make sacrifices, and
be willing to put others before their own pride and self interests. A
hero can be a person who is willing to risk themselves to save a life,
willing to fight and even die for a cause, and even just simply being
a good teacher or parent that make a difference in a person's life.We
can only hope that one day, we too will step up to the plate and
become that hero; willing to make a sacrifice, willing to stand up for
what we believe in and change a person?s life for the better. Only
then can we hope to be worthy of being called true heroes.
I hope this is helpful. If you have any questions regarding my answer
please don't hesitate to ask for further assistance.
Best regards,
Rainbow |
