Proof read the Cover letter:
Dear Mr. xxxxx,  
  
I wish to apply for the position of Warehouse Supervisor, which I saw
posted on CareerTimes.

I have ample working experience in the logistics industry. In
2003-2005, I worked in Expeditors Hong Kong Limited as an operation
assistant in Ocean Import department and later in Distribution Center,
where I have learned how to generate business opportunities by
promoting our innovative logistics services. And I have the chance to
handle several key accounts such as Flextronics and Tyco.

Currently, I am working in IDS Logistics Ltd as a Warehouse
Supervisor. I have to use my leadership skills in order to deploy the
warehouse manpower for maximum productivity to serve some famous
brands: Wyeth, Johnson & Johnson Vision Care and Gillette.

As for my education, I earned the degree of Bachelor of Science in
International Shipping and Transport Logistics with Second Class
Honours (Division 1) at Hong Kong Polytechnic University in 2003.

My ability to analyze problems from different angles was improved by
studying at the Australian Maritime College in Australia. I was
awarded the ?SPEED scholarship? by Hong Kong Polytechnic University
for this exchange programme. My student exchange experience gave me
the opportunity to meet people of different nationalities and to learn
how to deal with people from different cultures. Furthermore, I
developed strong communication and interpersonal skills.

I am currently pursuing a Master degree in Global Supply Chain
Management. I believe my continued education at the graduate level is
appropriate for this position. I have gained the knowledge of the
project management and the operation analysis.

I am confident that I can make a positive contribution to IDS
Logistics (Hong Kong) Ltd. I would like to have a chance to discuss my
career plans with you in an interview. My phone number is: xxxxxxx.I
appreciate your consideration.

Yours sincerely

Hello louislwy123-ga,

I have analyzed and corrected your cover letter for spelling, grammar,
and tone. For the most part it was quite good, but the main issue was
the lack of flow, which made it a little difficult to read. There were
also some extra details in the letter that would usually no be
included. Remember, if the letter is more than one page, then it's too
long!

Below is the corrected letter:

<BEGIN LETTER>

Dear Mr. xxxxx,  
  
I would like to apply for the Warehouse Supervisor position, which I
saw posted on CareerTimes on [date here].

Currently, I am a Warehouse Supervisor at IDS Logistics Ltd. My main
task is to manage warehouse manpower in order to maximize
productivity. My strong leadership skills have afforded me continued
success; in fact, we now serve numerous well known brands, including
Wyeth, Johnson & Johnson Vision Care and Gillette.

I also spent two years with Expeditors Hong Kong Limited, where I held
the role of operations assistant in multiple departments. During that
time I learned a great deal about business development through the
promotion of logistics services. I was also given the responsibility
to handle several key accounts, including Flextronics and Tyco.

As for my education, I earned the degree of Bachelor of Science in
International Shipping and Transport Logistics with Second Class
Honours (Division 1) at Hong Kong Polytechnic University in 2003.

My ability to analyze problems from different angles was strengthened
by attending an exchange programme at the Australian Maritime College,
which I attended on a full scholarship. This experience gave me
exposure to international cultures and further honed my communication
and interpersonal skills.

I am currently pursuing a graduate studies in Global Supply Chain
Management. I believe the courses I have completed in project
management and operations analysis are a good fit for the position at
hand.

I am confident that I can make a positive contribution to IDS
Logistics, and I would like to discuss this position with your
further. I can be reached at xxxxxxxxx. I appreciate your
consideration.

Sincerely,
xxxxxxx


<END LETTER>

Hopefully the letter above is to your satisfaction - if you have any
questions or concerns please post a clarification and I will respond
promptly.

Good luck with the job search :)

Cheers!

answerguru-ga

Good and constructive suggestions.

Thanks